This was my third elevator pitch and it was one that I actually delivered to a group of pre-dental students (I'm pre-dental). This is a re-recording of it that I made. I am a member of Delta Delta Sigma which is pre-dental honor society that is new to campus and I was out recruiting for them. I was trying to convince them to apply to our organization in an effort to both replace those members who will graduate in the Spring and expand our overall organization. I tried to focus more on the benefits and amenities of being a member of our organization than anything else.
Based on the feedback I received on my last pitch, I did not go into enough detail about the benefits of the organization so that is what I changed here. I agreed with the people who gave me feedback on that point. I went into a bit more detail about the benefits here as opposed to simply listing them off without any explanation. I didn't receive any feedback that I disagreed with though, which is a good thing of course!
Based on the feedback I received on my last pitch, I did not go into enough detail about the benefits of the organization so that is what I changed here. I agreed with the people who gave me feedback on that point. I went into a bit more detail about the benefits here as opposed to simply listing them off without any explanation. I didn't receive any feedback that I disagreed with though, which is a good thing of course!
Hey Abraham,
ReplyDeleteThe constructive criticism that I have to offer is dress better for the pitch and to not use the webcam. I did the same thing my first time, but this is the third one now. Other than that, you did a great job with everything else like focusing on the camera and being very detailed on your organization.
Check out my idea, if you dont mind!
http://jamestdrake25.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3-week-10.html
Abraham, As stated above, elevator pitches should be done in nicer clothing. Even though it's just a rough draft of what will be done in the real world, it's good to always keep that in mind. Good pitch! Good idea!
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Hi Abraham, I really enjoyed watching your elevator pitch. I thought that your idea was strong and you seemed quite enthusiastic about it during your pitch. Clothing being more business like is important however. Please check out my elevator pitch over here! http://jlopez3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
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