This is my second elevator pitch and it was one that I actually gave to a group of pre-dental students (Im pre-dental). Of course, I rerecorded it, but said the same things. I am a member of the American Student Dental Association (ASDA) and went to a meeting of pre-dental students to try recruiting them to our organization. In order to do that, they have to pay for a membership, which is $95 between national and local dues. I did not mention that in the elevator pitch, however, because I did not want them to lose interest. I focused far more heavily on the benefits that they would receive out of a membership with us instead.
Based on the feedback I received after my first elevator pitch, I seemed a little stiff and utilized few hand motions so I tried to incorporate a bit more hand motions and lighten up some to come off as a more comfortable and confident person. Overall, I thought that the feedback I received last time was pretty spot on and helped me to improve this time around. Although I know I still have some work to do, it is certainly an improvement from the first time.
I think it's too short, try to explain the shadow experience and mentor program a little more. I really like the concept. Every pre med student should consider joining ASDA if they want to be an aspiring doctor... I'm not sure you call doctors that. I did mine on parking you can check it out: http://notimportantrightnow.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteI don't think you seem stiff at all! I'll have to go check out your first pitch. You seem like a seasoned public speaker here. I have to agree with Star that it's a lot of information to cram into an elevator pitch, but I think you handled everything well. I want to know more, which I think is the point.
ReplyDeleteI would love your feedback on my latest pitch (http://adventuresinent.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html). My first pitch was a bit more like your second pitch, I used my body a lot more, and I tried to tone that down in this pitch, but watching your video, I think I may go back to the 3/4 body method. Your hand gestures really got my attention. Weird how that happens!
Hi Abraham! Great job overall! I really liked your idea overall. You did really well on taking what others said in their feedback from your first Elevator pitch and changing what you did in this Elevator pitch. I agree with what they said that by moving around you seem more confident and relaxed. You can look at my elevator pitch here: http://courtneysrymer.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
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